The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The following chart illustrates the pattern of spending weekly
income
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for families in one country in 1968 and 2018. At first glance, it is evident that the largest amount of money was allocated to food in 1968 and leisure in 2018. Another interesting point is that money spent on household
goods
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in 1968 was as much as that in 2018. Looking at the details of 1968 bars, 35% of weekly
income
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was spent on food, followed by housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
with 10% and leisure with less than 10%. After these, money allocated to household
goods
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, personal
goods
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and transport was 5% and almost half for each.
Lastly
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, fuel and power stand at the
last
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place with a little bit more than 5%. Taking a closer look at 2018 bars, families spend most of their salary on leisure by more than 20%. In the second place, housing used under 20% of
thier
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their
income
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, followed by transport with less than 15%. More than 5% of the
income
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was spent on household
goods
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.
While
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teh
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the
share of clothing and
footware
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footwear
was 10%, personal
goods
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and fuel and power included less than 5% of weekly
earning
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earnings
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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