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Writing Samples
Band 5

A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and get into the house tell your relative how to get from the train station to your house say when you will be home and suggest what you could do together that evening You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear… Write at least 150 words.

Dear Hanna, I am so happy
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while
Correct word choice
that
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 you can
coming
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come
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 with me. I know you arriving
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on monday
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monday
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Monday
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 morning but ı
wont
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won't
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 be home until the evening because I work at
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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. You
dont
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don't
 worry I explain everything
for
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to
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 you.
Firstly
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, when you get off the train you go to
bus
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the bus
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 station and you
wait
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wait for
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 1a bus. If the 1a bus
doesnt
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doesn't
 come you wait a 5a. Even if you take both buses, you have to get off at the hospital stop. You arrived a my home you
see
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saw
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 a big vase. You can see under
vase
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the vase
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 a key. So you welcome my home. You
dont
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don't
 worry
a
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about a
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cat and dog. They
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firstly
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first
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while
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apply
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they will smell.
Thety
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They
 will get used to
easily
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it easily
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. If you want to take a shower you can take it. Bathroom upstairs. If
you
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you are
you were
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 hungry you use a kitchen. I
wont
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won't
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 be late. You can relax until ı come Take care.
Your
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Yours
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truly
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Truly
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Grammatical Range
Try to improve grammatical accuracy for better clarity in your writing. For example, ensure subject-verb agreement and proper use of articles and conjunctions.
Coherence
Divide your paragraphs with clear ideas to improve coherence. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
Sentence Structure and Complexity
Work on sentence structure and complexity to enhance the writing tone. Try using more complex sentences where appropriate.
Task Response
The letter effectively covers all the task requirements, including arrangements for the keys, directions from the train station, and plans for the evening.
Tone
The tone of the letter is warm and friendly, making it appropriate for writing to a family member.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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