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Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages for individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 them renowned in their field. and become the reference that people go back to when they need something about their field.
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 to keep moving and trying a lot of different jobs,
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 Seek job security and
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Expand on both views regarding the advantages and disadvantages of sticking to one job versus changing jobs frequently. Provide more examples and reasons for each side of the argument.
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Improve the logical flow by adding connectors and linking words. Organize ideas into clear paragraphs for each view discussed and ensure balance between both arguments.
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The essay introduces the topic effectively and begins to explore the differing viewpoints.
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The essay attempts to provide reasoning for why people may choose either a stable or flexible career path.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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