WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart compares the
percentage
of adult male smokers
in seven countries along with
the world average in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, America has the highest percentage
of masculine smokers
individuals whereas
Australia has the lowest percentage
of smokers
male population. It is important to note that in 2000 there were more male smokers
whereas
in 2015 there were the lowest percentages of masculine smokers
.
In 2000, America was the country with the most male smokers
with
65%, followed by Bangladesh, Cuba and the World with 62%, 52%, and 42% of masculine Change preposition
at
smokers
, respectively. In the same year Egypt, Lebanon and Mexico had the same percentage
of individuals that smoke with
35%. The lowest Change preposition
at
percentage
of male smokers
was in Australia with 28%.
In 2015, America and Cuba had the same percentage
of masculine smoker populations with
51%. Egypt had a slightly similar Change preposition
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percentage
with 49% male smokers
which increased from 2000. Followed by Lebanon, Bangladesh and the World with 42%, 39% and 32% masculine individuals that smoke, respectively. The lowest percentages that we observed in 2015 were the countries of Mexico and Australia with 20% and 18% of male smokers
, respectively.Submitted by jessica.pastor.87 on
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