WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart compares the
percentage
of adult male
smokers
in seven countries
along with
the world average in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, America has the highest
percentage
of masculine
smokers
individuals
whereas
Australia has the lowest
percentage
of
smokers
male population. It is important to note that in 2000 there were more male
smokers
whereas
in 2015 there were the lowest percentages of masculine
smokers
. In 2000, America was the country with the most male
smokers
with
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65%, followed by Bangladesh, Cuba and the World with 62%, 52%, and 42% of masculine
smokers
, respectively. In the same year Egypt, Lebanon and Mexico had the same
percentage
of individuals that smoke
with
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35%. The lowest
percentage
of male
smokers
was in Australia with 28%. In 2015, America and Cuba had the same
percentage
of masculine smoker populations
with
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51%. Egypt had a slightly similar
percentage
with 49% male
smokers
which increased from 2000. Followed by Lebanon, Bangladesh and the World with 42%, 39% and 32% masculine individuals that smoke, respectively. The lowest percentages that we observed in 2015 were the countries of Mexico and Australia with 20% and 18% of male
smokers
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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