The graph below shows the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from 1981- 2014. Summaries and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The aim of
this
report is to describe the consumption of three jam types in an Asian country from the year
1981 to the year
of
2007. The data is based on a graph.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the three jam types are: butter
, margarine
and other low fat
and reduced spreads. At the beginning of the Add a hyphen
low-fat
analysis
it can be seen that Add a comma
analysis,
butter
and margarine
had already been known whereas
other low fat
and reduced spreads came into play only in the Add a hyphen
low-fat
year
of
1996.
Given the Change preposition
apply
data
it can be seen that from the start Add a comma
data,
butter
was the most popular choice until 1991 when margarine
took its place and butter
had
been declining ever since Wrong verb form
has
that
. Correct your spelling
then
While
the margarine
reached its top in 1991 and had been steadily used till 1996 it wasn’t always the first choice as people chose butter
more until 1991 and after 2006. Moreover
, in 2001 other low fat
and reduced spreads had reached Add a hyphen
low-fat
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
peak
and instantly started dropping again but was
still used the most in 2007.
As usual, most graphic analysis has a Change the verb form
were
peak
and fluctuates
up and down later, but Correct subject-verb agreement
fluctuate
the
Correct article usage
apply
margarine
broke this
stereotype and stayed in
its Change preposition
at
peak
for five years during
1991 and 1996. The Change preposition
between
butter
’s peak
was in 1986 and gradually going down it never had any other peaks. And while
low fat and reduced spreads were only found in 1996 it reached its peak
in five years and matched the margarines
use of that Change the wording
margarine
kinds of margarine
portions of margarine
year
and had been on top of other jams until the analysis was finished.
Generally, both the butter
and the margarine
had been on top of the most used spread for 10 years until other low fat
and reduced spreads took the top. All of them had their peaks and usually made a notable trip down after.Add a hyphen
low-fat
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, butter, margarine, peak with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 5 times.
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