Every country should have a free healthcare service, if this means the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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more serious. There are not enough
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. First of all, it will be a huge
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a huge economic output.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Basic human right
  • Socio-economic status
  • Early diagnosis
  • Medical attention
  • Disparities
  • Economic benefits
  • Productive population
  • Financial ruin
  • Medical expenses
  • Trade-offs
  • Limitations
  • Highly specialized treatments
  • Subsidized
  • Prioritize
  • Innovation
  • Private partnerships
  • Affordable medical solutions
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