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The two maps below show road to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The two maps below show road to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.
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The maps above display the roads leading to an urban hospital in 2007 and 2010, respectively.
According to
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 the maps, the changes concentrated in
two
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 areas: on the one hand, the designers added
two
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roundabouts
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 to improve transport efficiency;
on the other hand
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, the bus stations and the
car
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 parks were put in new locations. The introduction will begin with the
two
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roundabouts
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. One of them was directly accessible to the ring
road
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 rounding the city hospital,
while
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 the other was to the south of the hospital, and leading to the city
road
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. With the cooperation of the
two
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roundabouts
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, traffic can efficiently enter or leave the hospital.
In addition
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 to the
two
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 intersections, there were
also
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 some changes in the bus station and the
car
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 parks. The original six bus stations along the hospital
road
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 were demolished and relocated in between
two
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roundabouts
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. As for the
car
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 park beside the city
road
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, it was exclusive for staff, and a new public
car
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 park was set up next to the ring
road
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, roundabouts, car, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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