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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.
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‏The line graph illustrates the fluctuations in
shop
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 openings and
closures
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 in a specific region from 2011 to 2018. It is evident that the number of
shop
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closures
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 reached its nadir in 2015 compared to other years. ‏In 2011, the number of new shops surged to approximately 8,500.
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, the subsequent year witnessed a precipitous decline, resulting in nearly 4,000 new openings. By 2014, there was a pronounced upward trajectory, with new
shop
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 openings escalating to 6,000, only to experience a downturn of 4,000 in 2015.
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 figure remained stable from 2015 to 2017 before plummeting to 3,000 in 2018. ‏
Conversely
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, from 2011 to 2013, the number of
shop
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closures
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 fluctuated between 6,000 and 4,000. In 2015, the rate of
shop
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closures
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 dramatically decreased to 900,
thereafter
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 rising again to around 5,000 and maintaining a static level from 2015 through 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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