The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the possible places for a new supermarket in the
town
of Garlsdon. There are two sites that are more probable. The total population of
the
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Garsdon
town
is roughly 65000 and it has three
neighbors
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. Hindon,
bransdon
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Brandon
Branson
and Cransdon
that
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have
the
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population of 10000, 15000,
29000
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and 29000
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respectively. The first site, S1, is near to Hindon with the least number of people.
However
,
this
place is far from
town
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centre. It is
placed
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located
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on
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in
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the
northern west
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northernwest
of the
town
, near the industry facilities and houses in the northern
part
.
In addition
, there is a railway that
go
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through the
town
centre and
connect
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connects
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the west
part
to the east
part
of the
town
for better transportation. The second site, S2,
located
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in
town
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the town
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centre
that
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and
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is not a traffic zone. S2
in
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is near two other towns that have
greater
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a greater
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population. The
town
city is surrounded by
industry
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places shown in brown
in
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the map. S2 is a better option for those people
reside
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residing
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in
southern
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the southern
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part
of the
town
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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