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The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in USA in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in USA in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart
respresents
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represents
 the data about power generated by renewable and non-renewable energy sources in the USA between 2009 and 2019. The second pie chart displays the electricity generated using five different renewable resources for the same country and
same
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 time period.
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, the power generated by renewables increased significantly across the time period with sectors like wind and hydropower contributing the most in 2019. Non-renewables like natural gas increased in usage,
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 coal decreased over the years. It is evident from
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 graph that coal was the highest generator of electricity with 1756
billion
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kilowatt-hours
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 in 2009 which
reduced
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 by nearly
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half in 2019 ( 966
billion
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kilowatt-hours
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). The next biggest source was natural Gas at 921
billion
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kilowatt-hours
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 in 2009 which increased sharply to 1582
billion
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kilowatt-hours
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 in 2019, overtaking coal. Other non-renewables like petroleum and nuclear stayed relatively stable. In the second graph, it can be seen that hydroelectric was the highest contributor among the renewables in 2009 at 273
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 kilo-watt hours which stayed the same in 2019.
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 was overtaken by
wind
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the wind
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that
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 went from 94
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 in 2009 to just over thrice
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300
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kwh
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kWh
 in 2019. Power generated from solar energy saw a dramatic jump of 73
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 in 2019 from just 1
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 in 2009. Other sources namely geothermal and plant or animal matter remained almost the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kilowatt-hours, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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