Some students take a year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to work or to travel. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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I guess that the
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of social
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on society might be very different. Yes, social
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the costs of connections between people from different countries but it
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can be the
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for
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of terrorism and
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. In my opinion, we mustn’t forget about these risks especially nowadays. As we can see, in
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world the problem of terrorism is actual yet.
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, a
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of terrorists today use different internet platforms to communicate and plan operations. In my opinion, governments all over the world should pay
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problem and social
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can’t be
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uncontrollable. Grading The topic of grading has generated much discussion in recent years. My personal belief is that grading can really say a
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about
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student’s
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knowledge. It is essential for
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university
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to know whether
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student
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is studying
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or not. After
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will have
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university
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and if
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demonstrates bad knowledge
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the workplace it will decrease the reputation of
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that
overall
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will have
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on
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. But if
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student
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are studying
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the
university
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can dismiss
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before graduation. I understand Lida’s concern over the grading but I believe she misses
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point that I provided. Taxing unhealthy products The topic of taxing unhealthy products has generated much discussion in recent years. My personal belief is that it can be
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good idea that might increase social welfare. Unhealthy products especially with a
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of sugar can trigger addiction that after all will have
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on
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health. I understand Tanya’s concern over the families with low income but I believe that she misses another important point. We can use the revenue from
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to increase subsidies to
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families and
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initiative will have
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even
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these families. Because of
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thing
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I believe that we should at least try to realise
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taxing. AI The topic of AI has generated much discussion in recent years. My personal belief is that AI technology has more benefits
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minuses. I can’t agree with Megan about the rising inequality after using AI. We shouldn’t avoid
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of new technologies only because they will change the labour market. As
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engine, AI will cause a
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of big changes in
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market but after all
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of
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techlogies
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will increase
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social welfare. I guess that
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first
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stages of
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of AI government should help those workers who lost their
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, I think that with
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of AI will be a really good idea.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Real-world experience
  • Personal growth
  • Enhanced employability
  • Academic pressures
  • Maturity
  • Academic momentum
  • Financial implications
  • Out of sync
  • Lack of structure
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