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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed.
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The given table graph and pie charts represent data about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in one region of Britain.
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the other table depicts where the cash came from and charts picture how it was spent.
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, in the
table
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 the local budget has increased in all spheres since 2017.
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, in the
spendings
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,Salaries, as the main part,
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 show any significant changes. In terms of precipitation, Salaries were the highest
requierment
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requirement
requirements
 in both years,
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, since 2017 it has gone down in 2018, it
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 75
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 and stayed
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%. At the same time ,
Techonology
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technology
 increased almost twice, from 8% to 14% in the next annum. Notably, Buildings and transport stored the same result and kept
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stable. On the other side,
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 the sources,
National
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the National
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 Government has paid a little bit more than in 2017,from 175
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 to 177
millions
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.
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, the second highest index upsoared
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 10 % in comparison,
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, it was the only significant change which influenced
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the total. At the same moment, Others hasn't gone from different changes, with
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similar amounts as in the
last
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 year, 38
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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