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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The graph illustrates the amount of
goods
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 transported in the UK by road,
water
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, rail, and pipeline in
million
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tonnes
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 between 1974
to
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and
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 2002.
Overall
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,
in
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at
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 the top of the
graph
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graph,
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 there are two main transporting ways for
the
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apply
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goods
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 in the UK that are growing,
this
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 is by the roads and
water
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.
Also
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, there are two remaining ways that are fluctuating and almost staying the same, by railroads and by pipelines. The biggest way of transporting
the
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apply
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goods
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 in the UK is by the
roads
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road
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.
This
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 type of
transporting
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transport
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 is marginally growing from
approximatelly
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approximately
 70 in 1975 to almost 100 in 2000.
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, there is another way of transporting that had been rising was
water
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. In 1975 the
amount
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number
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 of
goods
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 transported by
water
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 was 40
million
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tonnes
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 and it
was rising
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rose
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 to almost 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.
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, the lowest amount of
goods
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 transported is seen by pipeline, starting almost at 0 in 1975 and growing to almost 25
million
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tonnes
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 in 1980 and remaining steady till 2000.
Also
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,
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there
are
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is
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 another way of transporting that fluctuated over
this
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 timeline,
this
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 is by rail. It started at 40 in 1975 and
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, water, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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