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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below illustrates data on the household recycling
rates
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 from three
countries
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,
France
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 ,
Germany
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 and The United Kingdom over a
ten-years
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ten-year
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 period from 2005 to 2015 .
Overall
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 , the UK and
Germany
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's
rates
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 kept rising over the given duration ,
on the other hand
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,
France
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's
rates
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 continued to decrease over the years despite
it
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starting at the highest point . Generally,
Germany
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 and The United Kingdom started with a fairly noticeable difference ,
however
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 ,the two
countries
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' household recycling
rates
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 kept on increasing throughout the years resulting in the two
countries
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 having nearly the same percentage by 2015 .
In contrast
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,
France
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 began with the highest
rates
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 in recycling yet the numbers kept declining
reaching
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 their lowest point in 2013 , afterwards the line started going up at a fast pace over a
two-yearyears
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two-year
 period from 2013 to 2015
however
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 the major collapse resulted in
France
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 having the lowest rate by 2015 . In conclusion,
while
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 the UK and
Germany
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 showed steady growth in household recycling
rates
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 over the period,
France
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 experienced a decline followed by a slight recovery, ultimately ending with the lowest rate among the three
countries
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 by 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, countries, france, germany with synonyms.
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