The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children’s health. To what extent do you agree with these views?

Childhood obesity

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rising in

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nations at an unprecedented rate in recent times. Certain people argue that

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issue is mainly

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consumption

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the consumption

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of junk

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others argue that

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problem solely depends on the

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parents

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supervision and guidance. In

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essay, I will discuss both views and will state my opinion.

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, the number of

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fast-food

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food

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restaurants in recent times

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increased in number. The ability to compete for land and locate near institutions significantly increases

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student traffic during lunch hours.

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, the increase in

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prices, convenience and

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hours

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availability

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led to the preference of consuming

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Western diet.

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, schools don't teach students how to prepare a healthy meal or never include it as a life course for students. These factors together

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the children towards unhealthy diet consumption

Fastfood

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Fast food

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restaurants cannot be totally blamed for

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behavior

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.

Parents

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in industrialized nations are busy with their work responsibilities on a daily basis, which leads to circumstances where children are left alone on their own to make decisions. The disposable income

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provided by

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to negotiate time and lack of time spent on educating children on consuming healthy

food

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this

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obestity

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obesity

epidemic. In conclusion, the problem cannot be totally pointed towards the fast

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restaurants and

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also

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held accountable for improving the

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health of these youngsters by guiding them towards a healthy diet by being an example themselves.