Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village
The map depicts the growth of
a
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English
village
over a
century
. From the late 19th
century
to the early 20th
century
the growth is primarily focused on a
train
station
while
from
early
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20th
century
onwards the development is centered around newly built major
transport
links. Most of the
population
was around the
village
center
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in the eight
hundreds
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but with the completion of the
railway
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railway,
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it quickly shifted towards the
train
station
in the early 19th
century
. As displayed in the graph, the original settlement was relatively small in the
center
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of the
village
near the already existing main
road
.
However
, a heavily populated area showed up around the Chorleywood
Station
the
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time the
railway
was completed. In the middle of
19th
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the 19th
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century
population
continued to grow around the
train
station
but in the late 19th
century
settlememts
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settlements
settlement
drastically appeared around the cross points of the newly built motorway and both the main
road
and the
railway
.
Population
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mainly grew south along the
railway
in the middle 19th
century
, covering the crossing of the main
road
and the
railway
and a great part southeast of the
station
.
However
, with the completion of the motorway in 1970,
population
growth in the rest of the
century
shifted entirely away from the
railway
station
. In fact, large settlements began growing at the crossing of major
transport
links which
are
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the fastest
population
growths
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growth
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seen in the past 150 years. In a nutshell,
population
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the population
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in the
village
was originally clustered in the
center
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near the main
road
but with the completion of more
transport
routes settlements which grew dramatically chose to live next to the crossing of major
transport
links and the
train
station
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, century, train, station, transport, population, railway, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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