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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph provides information on the diversity in the
coffee's
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coffee
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export
 volume of
Brazil
, Colombia and Costa Rica for
a
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the
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 decade
since
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from
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 2002 until 2012. The units are measured in
million
kilograms
. Generally speaking, it is evident that Brazilian people
export
the
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apply
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coffee
product
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products
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 the most
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 two countries
which
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where
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 the amount
lower
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is lower
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. First and foremost, it is noticeable that for
Brazil
, the
weigth
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weight
 of exported
coffee
 in
increase
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increased
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 continuously, from approximately 12
million
kilograms
 in 2002 reach to 25
million
kilograms
 in 2012. Even
weight
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the weight
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 of
coffee
 in Costa Rica was higher than
brazil
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Brazil
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estimate
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estimated
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3
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at 3
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million
kilograms
 in 2002, but the
export
 trend
declinded
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declined
 to be 7 in 2006, and fluctuated by rising to 20
million
kilograms
 in 2012.
However
, the volume
still
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is still
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 lower than
Brazil
's. For
Colombia
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Colombia's
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 exported amount, at the beginning, the volume
tend
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tended
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 to be uptrend until
in
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apply
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2006,
the
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when the
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 weight was 12
million
kilograms
.
Immidiatly
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Immediately
, the
coffee
 amount decreased significantly to almost
meet
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2
million
kilograms
 in 2008.
In
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On
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 the other hand, Colombia
improve
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improved
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their
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its exports
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export
 and the trend
was
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skyrocketed and touched the apex with 15
million
kilograms
 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, export, brazil, million, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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