The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the
population
rate among four Asian cities between 1970 and 2020, and predictions in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, the
population
percentage
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percentages
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in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia both show an upward trend. From 1970 to 1990, the rate of
population
living in Malaysia was similar to Philippines, which was roughly 30% to 45%.
However
, from 1990 to 2040, the figure considerably rose from 45% to over 80%, which made Malaysia become the largest-
population
city in Asia. Regarding Thailand and Indonesia, in 1970, there were about 19% and 15%
people
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of people
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living in these two cities respectively.
Nonetheless
, in 2000, the two rates became the same at 30%.
Then
, the
residents
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number of residents
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in Thailand gradually climbed to about 45% in 2040,
while
Indonesia rapidly grew to 60%. In comparison,
although
Philippines
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the Philippines
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maintained the largest number of dwellers in 1970 and 1990, with roughly 31% and 50%
population
, it faced a slight drop from 50% to nearly 40% in 2010. The figure eventually rose to 55% in 2040.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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