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Many people believe that social networking sites (Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

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These days social
media
 is important in our lives.Most people think that social
media
 namely : Instagram Twitter,Google Facebook and others ,
has
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 a negative impact on
youngsters
 .In my opinion ,I don’t think that social
media
 is as bad as some people say .
Firstly
 ,if we
use
 social
media
 properly it can help us enough.Nowadays most businessmen
use
 social
media
 . Social
media
 is important for their business .Even some teenagers earn money from social
media
. But the other side of the coin is that most
youngsters
use
 social
media
 for useless things.It is
serious
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 problem
between
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for
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youngsters
.Of course, it has a negative impact on their ability .The main part of them are teenagers but some of them
adults
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.If we all stopped using social
media
 it would make a profit for
youngsters
,but it wouldn’t make a profit for
businessman
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. All in all,
I’m
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I do
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 not mind using social
media
 .Because social
media
 gives me a lot of
chance
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 for my study .I mean social
media
 is fine if we
use
 it for useful things !
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You've correctly identified the pros and cons of social media, showing a balanced perspective.
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The essay demonstrates awareness of the relevance of social media in modern business and social life.

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