Write about the following topic: The secret to success in life. Getting the right qualifications Contacts You should explain which factor is more important in achieving success, giving reasons to support your answer.

Some people say that
university
Correct article usage
a university
show examples
education is the best way to achieve
siccess
Correct your spelling
success
in
life
,
while
others believe it is no longer true.After you
finished
Wrong verb form
finish
show examples
school you will have one way.They are
sdudying
Correct your spelling
studying
university
Change preposition
at university
show examples
or running
your
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
own
business
Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
show examples
.Many younger choose
sdudying
Wrong verb form
to study at
show examples
university
becouse
Correct your spelling
because
they
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
think studying
university
Change preposition
at university
show examples
is easier than studying
school
Change preposition
at school
show examples
. Personally,When they enter
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
university
they think that will be
everythings
Correct your spelling
everything
easy but
this
isnʼt true.After
enter
Change the verb form
entering
show examples
the
university
you
studying
Wrong verb form
study
show examples
hard
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
to find
good
Change the article
a good
show examples
job.
University
education
Add a missing verb
is necesarry
show examples
necesarry
Correct your spelling
necessary
achieve
Fix the infinitive
to achieve
show examples
success in
life
but not
completly
Correct your spelling
completely
.
Becouse
Correct your spelling
Because
whole
subjects
arenʼt need for you in the future.
For example
math
Correct article usage
a math
show examples
teacher isnʼt know biology so you know studying hard
Change preposition
on this
show examples
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
subjects
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
will
be
Change the verb form
need
show examples
need
Add the particle
need to
show examples
enter your enamoured job. At least,
university
Correct article usage
a university
show examples
education
need
Change the verb form
needs
show examples
you but
isnʼt
Correct your spelling
it
everytime
Replace the word
every time
show examples
.
but
Capitalize word
But
show examples
as
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
Said
Fix capitalization
said
show examples
before all
subjects
arenʼt
help
Replace the word
helpful
show examples
in your job.
Itʼs
Correct your spelling
It is
important for you to study science that will help you in the future.I prefer
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
all
subjects
becouse
Correct your spelling
because
all
subjects
necesarry
Correct your spelling
necessary
and
signaficant
Correct your spelling
significant
in my
life
.I think
everythings
Correct your spelling
everything
happen
Correct subject-verb agreement
happens
show examples
in my
life
then
these
subjects
will
be need
Change the verb form
be needed
show examples
.
Submitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Try to develop your main idea more clearly by explaining how university education contributes or does not contribute to success.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that align with the question.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating logical progression and connections between sentences and paragraphs. This will improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
You've provided a perspective on why university education may or may not lead to success.
task achievement
The essay includes some reasoning and examples related to your main point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: