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Band 5

Write a letter to the organiser of the course. In your letter: Give details of the course you took part in Sat what you find useful on the course Suggest ways the course could be improved

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Good day,
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. Andersen! I am
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listened
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 your course
for
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on
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 creating
design
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the design
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 of mobility applications. In my opinion,
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perfect
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 experience, and I
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 a lot of ideas for my next projects. You are using 5 themes during your
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, and all from
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 was opened is perfect. You touched
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on creating
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 ideas, projecting
scheme
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the scheme
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 of
program
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the program
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, forming basic anatomy, writing code and fixing bugs.
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,
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 only theory, and you never
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 in
programming
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 sphere. I am you offer my help. For your performance may be realistic, I will create details. In speech
are need
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 steps
detail
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 and technical info.
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as
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apply
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,
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 I and my team can help you on
scene
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 with
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 realistic examples. Its collaboration is good for
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 sides.
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, you have a lot
followers
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of followers
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 base, who
planning
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 go into development applications. And they will be going to your course from year to year
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 take a new experience and ideas. I hope will you answer my letter. Looking forward to hearing from you. My sincerely, Cusnir Iaroslav.

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task achievement
You have provided a complete response by mentioning the details of the course, its usefulness, and suggestions for improvement. However, try to elaborate a bit more on your suggestions to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a more logical structure in your writing by organizing the content into clear sections: introduction, details of the course, what you found useful, and suggestions for improvement.
coherence cohesion
Combine sentences and use linking words to improve the flow of ideas. For instance, "You touched on creating ideas, projecting scheme of program, forming basic anatomy, writing code, and fixing bugs."
greeting and closing
The greeting "Good day, Mr. Andersen!" and closing "Looking forward to hearing from you. My sincerely, Cusnir Iaroslav." are very polite and appropriate for formal writing.
task achievement
Your intention to offer collaboration adds a practical and engaging perspective to your letter, showcasing initiative and a willingness to contribute.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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