The diagram below shows proposed changes to Sidborough College for its development into Sidborough University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows proposed changes to Sidborough College for its development into Sidborough University.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the modifications suggested for the transformation of Siborough
college
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to a university. The college is surrounded by a flowing river and a pathway. New facilities have been proposed to provide for educational and
accomodation
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accommodation
assistance. Extension of existing classrooms and playfields are among the other proposals. The most noticeable suggestions are the construction of new offices for teachers and a library centre in the middle of the
campus
. Two separate buildings for the student union and residents would be constructed in the north-western part of the
campus
, across the river. In order to cross the river and commute to these buildings, a new footbridge is
also
planned
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the northern side of the
campus
. The main college building would see an extension in the form of lecture halls on two sides of the building. A sports complex is
also
suggested to be built intersecting the south-western portion of the playing fields which are situated
in
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the eastern side of the
campus
.
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