Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nations. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Other
people
think that global sport
Change the noun form
sports
events
are ideal avenue
to showcase globally the capabilities of the hosting nations. Fix the agreement mistake
avenues
While
other people
oppose the idea of hosting, as it is mainly expensive. In this
essay, I will discuss why I partially agree on
the latter statement of waste of funds on the Change preposition
with
host
country.
On one hand, the host
country will benefit from the opportunity to boost the economy
. From the rise on
Change preposition
in
number
of tourists, athletes and Change the article
a number
the number
spectaturs
there will be Correct your spelling
spectators
circulation
of money and goods. Correct article usage
the circulation
Additionally
, the nation's wonders will be featured such
as the beaches, islands, and other tourist spots. Aside from the natural wonders, there will also
be promotion
of Add an article
the promotion
a promotion
people
, culture and tradition. As a result
, the country will attract more tourist
and potential investors. But, Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
this
can be a gateway to environmental problems. Not every tourist have
the social responsibility of taking care of the facilities and natural fauna of the place.
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
On the other hand
, the place who
will Correct pronoun usage
that
host
the
sports Correct article usage
apply
events
such
as Correct article usage
the olympics
olympics
will invest vastly Change the capitalization
Olympics
on
infrastructure. Change preposition
in
Additionally
, aside from construction expenses, there will be overhead cost
on Fix the agreement mistake
costs
labor
. The investment will only be justifiable if the profit can supplement the capital loss spent on the event. Sadly, based on the previous hosting nations Change the spelling
labour
such
as Brazil the facilities were wasted and the maintenance cost is another issue. For a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a third world country
third world countries
third world
Add a hyphen
third-world
countries
it will be hard Add a comma
countries,
as
to balance the Correct word choice
apply
economy
and allocate budget
for building domes. Correct article usage
a budget
As a result
, there were fewer countries who
would volunteer to Correct pronoun usage
that
host
Olympic events
.
Additionally
, places who
participate Correct pronoun usage
that
on
hosting sports Change preposition
in
events
faces
problems of pollution Correct subject-verb agreement
face
such
as waste disposal. The local government's budget is affected as they need to dispose
the accumulated garbage collected from Add the preposition
dispose of
large
number of Change the article
a large
the large
people
.
In conclusion, although
hosting huge sports events
can stimulate the economy
the cost it takes to establish facilities is too expensive and unjustifiable. On
Change preposition
In
short
term, there will be Add an article
the short
fluctuation
Add an article
a fluctuation
on
Change preposition
in
economy
, but Add an article
the economy
on
the long run, there will be Change preposition
in
financial
loss.Add an article
a financial
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task achievement
Ensure that all examples provided directly support your argument for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use a concluding sentence for each paragraph to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Clarify some of the points to avoid ambiguity, particularly around the impact of hosting events.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion, setting up the essay structure well.
task achievement
Good balance in discussing both perspectives on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Effective use of paragraphs to organize different points and ideas.