The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.

The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology  graduates after working for 5 years.
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piece of writing contains a pie chart and a table. The pie chart tells us about the destination of graduates after completing their bachelor's degree in a university in
antrhropology
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anthropology
and it
also
shows the percentage of the students.
Whereas
the table depicts the types of employment, occupied by the graduates after 5 years of work and the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
of their pay as well. Commencing
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pie chart,
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shows
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that near to 52% of students prefer full-time work, 15% part-time and only 12% of individuals are unemployed
according to
the report.
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5%
graduates
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of graduates
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favour part-time work
along with
their studies and up to 8% of individuals go for full-time postgrad studies,
whereas
8%
resources
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are unknown. Moving to the table, that depicts the figure of salaries and types of employment of the
Antrhropology
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Anthropology
students. As far as
Freelanceing
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Freelancing
is concerned, 40% of freelancers are paid $100,000 and 5% below $50,000.
Additionally
, in the government sector 5%
individuals
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are offered salary below $50,000 and 50% are
allorted
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allotted
allocated
up to $100.000 yearly.
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, in
the
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private
companies
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companies,
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10% of workers are paid near to $49,999 and 30%
employees
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of employees
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above
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$99,999 as per
report
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the report
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bachelor's degree
  • anthropology alumni
  • employment sectors
  • salary ranges
  • academic roles
  • field research
  • public sector
  • non-profit organizations
  • private sector jobs
  • continuing education
  • job market trends
  • financial prospects
  • career progression
  • economic context
  • geographic location
  • cost of living
  • salary increases
  • experience
  • earning potential
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