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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of
flims
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films
 created by five
contries
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countries
 in three different years. The horizontal axis
represent
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represents
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 the names of the countries
while
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 the vertical axis
represent
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represents
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number
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the number
a number
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 of
films
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ز A
showd
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shows
 that it had the same amount of
films
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 created in 2007 and 2008,
then
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 it had a small decline in production to
reached
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reach
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 80 in 2009. B remained steady from 2007 to 2008 with 50
films
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, after
that
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that,
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 it had a significant increase to
reached
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reach
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it
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its
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 peak in 2009 with almost 70
films
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. In regard to other countries C , D and E, there were not any huge
fluctuation
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 in
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the productions
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productions
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production
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 of
films
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.
Overall
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, A
tend
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tends
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 to be the highest country that produced
films
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 in all three periods of time with more than 80
films
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 in all the years
that
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apply
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mentioned,
while
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 E country seemed to be the lowest among all countries with approximately 10
films
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 every year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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