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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a ladybird.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a ladybird.
The illustrations depict the ladybird's life
cycle
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 and its body parts.
Overall
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, the whole
cycle
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 takes around a month. The longest
stage
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 of its life is the larval
stage
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.
It is clear that
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 its anatomy is simple, and its wing's colour is vivid.
Initially
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, the egg is laid under the leaf. Eggs are packed together, and it takes 2 to 5
days
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 at
this
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stage
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.
Next,
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the larva emerges from the egg. It spends another 21
days
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 eating the leaves.
In addition
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, it only stays at one tree. Around Week 3 of the
cycle
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, the larva transforms into a pupa. At
this
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stage
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, it takes another 7
days
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 for the pupa to remain stable under the leaf. The adult ladybird hatches and spends only a few
days
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 to mate and reproduce. Eventually, the
lady bird
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ladybird
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 lays its eggs under the leaf to complete its life
cycle
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. Its body is composed of 8 parts: the head, antenna, eye, Red Elytra, wing, abdomen, leg and pronotum. The most outstanding part is its Red Elytra. It is a hard shell with
bright
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a bright
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 red colour to attract its mate. It is the outer part of its wings which are transparent.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle, stage, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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