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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts present the main factors for visiting Orange City in two different years and show each reason with a percentage .
Overall
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 , it was important that the number of tourists has increased almost twice within 10 years; the most interesting part was that the visitors had a high diamond in restaurants in 2016 and that was the main factor compared to others.
According to
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 the charts, at the start, tourists 1
million
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 in 2006 and reached 1.9
million
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 by 2016 which shows that Orange Ciry worked so much hard to attract more visitors;
Moreover
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, annual events and museums were the main reason to visit the city in 2006 ;
thereafter
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, restaurants and annual events have the main factors to visit the city in 2016
while
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 theatres and others got fewer attractions. The chart demonstrates that in the beginning , the number of tourists reached about 1
million
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 in 2006 ;
thereafter
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, it grew up to 1.9
million
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 in 2016 ;
moreover
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,
museum
Correct article usage
the museum
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 factor got much less in 2016
while
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 restaurants were the main one in 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, thereafter, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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