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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent times the use of the
internet
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 has increased. Many
people
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 buy
items
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 from the
internet
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. I think that the merits of shopping
from
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on
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 the
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internet
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Internet
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is
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are
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 overpower the demerits.
This
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buing
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buying
being
 things from the
internet
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. On the one hand, there are many advantages
about
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to
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 buying
items
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 from the
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internet
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Internet
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. The first advantage is
time consuming
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.
People
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 may spend less time on shopping rather than going to crowded
shopes
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shoppes
shops
.
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, my uncle used to buy clothes from famous programs like
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 and
temu
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due to
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 his busy schedule.
Thus
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, he boosts the balance in his work and personal life. Another advantage to be considered is the low price. There are many offers and discounts which encourage
people
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 to
huy
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buy
 online shopping.
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, on block
friday
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Friday
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 there are huge
of
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apply
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discounts on various
items
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such
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 as
furnatures
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furniture
, food and clothes.
As a result
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,
people
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motivate
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are motivated
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 to buy those things at lower prices.
On the other hand
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, there are frequent disadvantages
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to
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 online shopping.
Firstly
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, some
people
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 complain about the fake
items
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. They
recieve
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receive
itme
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time
 with bad quality
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, not
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 like the same picture. A good example here is the result of conducted research at Glasgow University illustrates that 80% of
people
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 who
huy
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buy
items
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 from the
internet
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 are not
satisfay
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satisfy
satisfied
 with the quality of
items
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.
Second,
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there are some programs that take too much time to
recive
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receive
 their
items
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. They suffer that it
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 more than 1
months
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month
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 to
recive
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receive
 their
items
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. To
illstrate
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illustrate
, my friend bought from
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the centerpoint
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centerpoint
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CenterPoint
center point
 program and she waited for more than 2 months. In conclusion, the
internet
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 plays a vital role in our lives. I agree that the beneficial impacts
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 online shopping
is
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 more than the
determental
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detrimental
 ones.
Therefore
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 , there should be
a
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apply
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stict
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strict
 laws on online shopping to encourage
people
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 to buy from the
internent
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Internet
.

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advice
Improve grammatical accuracy by paying attention to subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency.
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Expand on counterarguments to make the discussion more balanced.
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Provide more specific examples and evidence to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are organized logically within paragraphs, making it easy to follow the argument.
task achievement
The writer addresses both advantages and disadvantages, showing an understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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