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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data on worldwide
sales
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 of the most famous mobile phone brands, namely
Samsung
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, Apple,
Nokia
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 and LG,
as well as
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 ZTE between 2009 and 2013.
Overall
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,
sales
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 of
Samsung
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, Apple and ZTE increased during that time,
while
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sales
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 of
Nokia
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 and LG decreased.
In addition
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,
although
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Nokia
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 was a leader in 2009 and 2011,
Samsung
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 managed to surpass it in 2013. To start, Apple sold the fewest
units
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 of phones in 2009, particularly less than 50
million
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, but after a slight growth, amount of sold
units
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 constituted approximately 150
million
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 in 2013. An indicator describing ZTE's
sales
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 did not change much as it was equal to less than 100
million
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units
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 in both 2009, 2011 and 2013 but with a minimal difference. Demand for LG's production declined and
as a result
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, their
sales
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 went up from above 100
million
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units
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 in 2009 to nearly 80
million
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units
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 in 2013. The figure for
Samsung
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 experienced only an upward trend,
moreover
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, it climbed from about 230
million
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units
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 to almost 450
million
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.
However
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,
in contrast
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 with
Samsung
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, the number of phones sold by
Nokia
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 dramatically declined from more than 400
million
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 in 2009 to about 250
million
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units
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 in 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, samsung, nokia, units, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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