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The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.

The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.
#ethanol #fuel #corn
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The provided picture gives information
how
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ethanol
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 fuel is manufactured from
corn
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.
Overall
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, there are 9 stages in
this
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 diagram, including storing, milling, cooking, fermentation, separating, purifying
ethanol
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,
storing
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and storing
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 before delivering
ethanol
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 to use
for
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in
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 gas
station
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stations
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The first step is
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 that collected
corn
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 is delivered by workers to
storage
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the storage
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 center, where save
corn
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. After that, corns are directed to the milling machine, where grinding.
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that
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grinding
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grind
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corn
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adds
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a
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water and
prepares
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prepare
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during
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 the 4 hours before fermentation.
Subsequently
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,
fermenting
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the fermenting
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 process continues for 48 hours.
Following
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this
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stages
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stage
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, prepared
corn
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 is divided
liquid
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into liquid
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 and solid
product
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products
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then
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 the liquid is sent to
purfying
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purifying
ethanol
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 during the 5 hours and prepared
ethanol
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 is delivered by lorry to the storage.
Finally
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,
ethanol
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 is transformed
to
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the
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 gas station for use. The cycle repeats continuously to ensure a consistent supply of
ethanol
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 to gas stations.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, corn with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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