You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. •Describe the vacation spot you have chosen . •Explain how you plan to spend time there. •Invite your friend to join on your vacation

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centre and I really want to go. I'm very interested in playing football and it gives me pleasure. You will have a good time if you go with me. Your feet will need boots, a T-shirt and shorts. Yes, you can take a ball with you. The cost is 300

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invite others who are interested in football. Teaches everything step by step from the beginning. We will meet you at the Sports Centre in Piskent district on Monday at 10 o'clock See you soon ZIYODA

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Ensure the letter focuses on a vacation spot, as per the task requirement.

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Provide more detailed plans regarding how you intend to spend the time at the location.

coherence cohesion

Maintain a logical progression of ideas related to the vacation topic throughout the letter.

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The letter has a friendly and inviting tone, suitable for writing to a friend.

coherence cohesion

The opening and closing of the letter are clear and appropriate to a friendly letter.

coherence cohesion

Logical paragraphs divide related information, enhancing clarity.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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in additional
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for example
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therefore
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

133 words

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