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A new sports centre has opened in your area. You want to visit the new sports centre and get some information. Write an letter to your friend to invite him/her.

#sports #centre #area #visit #information #friend
Hi Samy How are you? There opened
new
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a new
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sport
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sports
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 centre.
This
 place is in Boston.We go swimming.Frankly
speking
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speaking
,
this
 is very interesting.As far as I know,
this
 sport you lovely.
Therefor
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Therefore
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,do you go
to
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apply
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with me? We will need shorts and glasses.By the way,The coach’s name is David so
he
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he is
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 very kind.We will meet you on Sunday at 6 o’clock See you soon
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task achievement
Make sure to provide a clear introduction of the sports centre, including any specific details that might interest your friend. This will enhance the response's completeness.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraphing to ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea. For example, separate the invitation plan from the description of the sports centre.
task achievement
Add more detail to your invitation, such as why it would be fun or beneficial, to enhance the richness of the task achievement.
task achievement
The letter uses a friendly and inviting tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins with a greeting and ends with a closing, providing a clear sense of structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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