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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
#households #income
The following chart illustrates the
number
 of US
households
 by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. At first glance, it is evident that the
number
 of
families
 which earned 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
 was the lowest in all the years covered in the graph. Looking at the details, 2007 and 2015 have the same trends. Most
families
 had an income of 100,000
dollars
 or more with over 30
millions
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million
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 in 2015 and
near
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nearly
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 30
millions
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million
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 in 2007. The second group of
families
 with the most earnings was the ones who earned 25,000 to 49,999
dollars
 with approximately 30
millions
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million
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 in 2015 and more than 25
millions
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million
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 in 2007. As the
number
 of
households
 with less than 25,000
dollars
 was 25
millions
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million
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 in 2007, it was more
thwn
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than
then
 that in 2015. The
number
 of
households
 with 50,000 to 74,000
dollars
 in 2007 was as much as those in 2015.
Lastly
, the count of
families
 with 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
 in 2007 was almost the same as those in 2015 with approximately 15
millions
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million
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.
However
, 2011 had another story. Most
families
 earned 25,000 to 49,999
dollars
 with
near
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nearly
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 30
millions
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million
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.
In addition
, the
amount
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number
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 of
households
 who earned less than 25,000, 100,000
dollars
 or more was so close
with
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to
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 a little bit less than 30
millions
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million
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 and less than
than
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apply
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that, respectively. The two
remains
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remaining
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 income groups for 2011 had nearly
the
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apply
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similar trends as those in 2007 and 2015.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, families, dollars, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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