You have recently started working in a new company. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news
Dear Mr Jim,
I hope
this
message finds you well. I am writing this
letter to let you know about that
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job
position I got recently at TRI Oakville.
I know its
been two months Correct your spelling
it's
we
didn't Correct word choice
since we
met
and Change the verb form
meet
obviously
I know you are busy with college Add a comma
obviously,
work
and I am busy with my work
. Do you remember ladt
time when we met I Correct your spelling
last
explained
you that I Add the preposition
explained to
want
to change my Wrong verb form
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job
.
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Finally
, after trying so hard at got the Ophthalmic technician job
at TRI Oakville. I told you, I was not happy with my last
job
as my company was not giving me full-tims
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full-time
work
from
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for
past
6 months and I Correct article usage
the past
was keep
requesting them for it. So Change the verb form
kept
this
job
is full-time Monday to Friday.
I am very happy also
I wanted to work
in medical
field because I have done nursing back home.Add an article
the medical
This
company have three locations and I am working in Oakville
location. Some days I am doing front desk Correct article usage
the Oakville
also
, this
is a retina specialist cilinc
. It is so fascinating to Correct your spelling
clinic
ceiling
work
with doctors. Everyday
I am learning new skills. I remember you are Replace the word
Every day
also
studying in medical
field I will recommend you to go into Add an article
the medical
this
feild
, it is Correct your spelling
field
very
interesting Correct article usage
a very
job
Please let me know if you have some time on
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apply
this
coming weekend so that we could
meet.
Hope to hear back soon.
Yours faithfully
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task response
The letter provides a complete response to the task with clear reasons for changing jobs, a description of the new job, and additional personal news. Consider structuring the points more clearly in separate paragraphs for greater clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Improve logical structure by organizing ideas into distinct paragraphs, making the progression of ideas smoother.
task response
The letter includes a friendly and suitable writing tone, making it appropriate as a personal letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are used correctly, reflecting an understanding of informal letter conventions.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,