You have recently started working in a new company. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news

Dear Mr Jim, I hope
this
message finds you well. I am writing
this
letter to let you know about
that
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the
job
position I got recently at TRI Oakville. I know
its
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it's
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been two months
we
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since we
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didn't
met
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and
obviously
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I know you are busy with college
work
and I am busy with my
work
. Do you remember
ladt
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last
time when we met I
explained
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you that I
want
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wanted
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to change my
job
.
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Finally
, after trying so hard at got the Ophthalmic technician
job
at TRI Oakville. I told you, I was not happy with my
last
job
as my company was not giving me
full-tims
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full-time
work
from
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past
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the past
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6 months and I
was keep
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requesting them for it. So
this
job
is full-time Monday to Friday.  I am very happy
also
I wanted to
work
in
medical
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field because I have done nursing back home.
This
company have three locations and I am working in
Oakville
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location. Some days I am doing front desk
also
,
this
is a retina specialist
cilinc
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clinic
ceiling
. It is so fascinating to
work
with doctors.
Everyday
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I am learning new skills. I remember you are
also
studying in
medical
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field I will recommend you to go into
this
feild
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field
, it is
very
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interesting
job
Please let me know if you have some time
on
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this
coming weekend so that we
could
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meet. Hope to hear back soon. Yours faithfully Sij
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task response
The letter provides a complete response to the task with clear reasons for changing jobs, a description of the new job, and additional personal news. Consider structuring the points more clearly in separate paragraphs for greater clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Improve logical structure by organizing ideas into distinct paragraphs, making the progression of ideas smoother.
task response
The letter includes a friendly and suitable writing tone, making it appropriate as a personal letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are used correctly, reflecting an understanding of informal letter conventions.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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