You have recently started working in a new company. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news

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Dear Mr Jim, I hope

this

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message finds you well. I am writing

this

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letter to let you know about

that

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apply

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the

job

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position I got recently at TRI Oakville. I know

its

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it's

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been two months

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since we

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didn't

met

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meet

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and

obviously

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obviously,

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I know you are busy with college

work

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and I am busy with my

work

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. Do you remember

ladt

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last

time when we met I

explained

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explained to

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you that I

want

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wanted

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to change my

job

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Finally

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, after trying so hard at got the Ophthalmic technician

job

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at TRI Oakville. I told you, I was not happy with my

last

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job

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as my company was not giving me

full-tims

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full-time

work

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from

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for

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past

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the past

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6 months and I

was keep

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kept

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requesting them for it. So

this

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job

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is full-time Monday to Friday. I am very happy

also

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I wanted to

work

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medical

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the medical

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field because I have done nursing back home.

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company have three locations and I am working in

Oakville

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the Oakville

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location. Some days I am doing front desk

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this

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is a retina specialist

cilinc

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clinic

ceiling

. It is so fascinating to

work

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with doctors.

Everyday

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I am learning new skills. I remember you are

also

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studying in

medical

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the medical

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field I will recommend you to go into

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feild

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field

, it is

very

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a very

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interesting

job

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Please let me know if you have some time

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apply

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this

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coming weekend so that we

could

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can

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meet. Hope to hear back soon. Yours faithfully Sij

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task response

The letter provides a complete response to the task with clear reasons for changing jobs, a description of the new job, and additional personal news. Consider structuring the points more clearly in separate paragraphs for greater clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Improve logical structure by organizing ideas into distinct paragraphs, making the progression of ideas smoother.

task response

The letter includes a friendly and suitable writing tone, making it appropriate as a personal letter to a friend.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing are used correctly, reflecting an understanding of informal letter conventions.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

235 words

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The Closing

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