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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your friend Say how you want them to help you to get back in touch

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter regarding the sports
article
 you
have
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published yesterday
on
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 the
national post
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National Post
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 newspaper. I was reading the newspaper in the morning today. I found a sports
article
of
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 edition 27
in
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the national
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national post
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National Post
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 newspaper .
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 the person you wrote
article
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the article
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 about is my childhood friend. I felt very glad when I read about her after so long. We were
long time
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 friends but we lost
our
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contact 10 years ago . I moved to
canada
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Canada
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 for higher studies and she could not continue her
study
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studies
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 because of
poor
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her poor
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 financial situation. She joined badminton later . we both got busy in our
career
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and family and could not get enough
tume
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time
 to meet each other . Gradually, we lost contact
due to
 not having mobile phones in those times . But when I read her about the
article
 today . I
remembered
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 our childhood memories when we used to spend all the time together . I want you to help me to contact her back . It would be very helpful if you could provide me
her
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with her
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 phone number and address . I look forward
for
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 your response Yours faithfully Arshdeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Work on a smoother flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Ensure a suitable and formal writing tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a greeting and a closing, creating a complete format.
task achievement
The response completes all parts of the task: mentioning the article, explaining the lost contact, and requesting help.
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