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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to the local council. In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours Suggest what should be done about the problem.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am compelled to write about my profound dismay in context to the system of collecting rubbish from the streets which is adversely affecting me and my neighborhood. I am Shelly, a resident of Portsmouth
society
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Society
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. I would like to shed light upon the new system of gathering household waste
is
Correct pronoun usage
that is
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 not working effectively. An employee who is assigned
for
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to
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this
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 task
do
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does
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 not collect waste
of
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from
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 every house and often
do
Correct subject-verb agreement
does
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 not show up on assigned days. Another concern is,
he
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that he
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build
Wrong verb form
built
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 several piles of trash on the corner of the street which made
an
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the
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 area
smells
Correct subject-verb agreement
smell
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 awful. All the society members and I are really disappointed
from
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in
with
by
about
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this
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 situation as it is giving rise to several
disease causing
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disease-causing
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 insects in the area and spreading infection among people. An odd odour in the community made it hard for us to breathe. In
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 circumstances, I would like you to take immediate action to tackle
this
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 issue and keenly address the responsibilities
to
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of
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 an individual who
work
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works
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 in our area. I hope you will give urgent consideration to
this
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 matter. Yours sincerely, Shelly

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea for clearer communication.
logical structure
Enhance logical flow by possibly using more linking words between sentences and paragraphs.
complete response
The letter appropriately addresses the task with a full response, outlining the problem, effects, and proposed solution clearly.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitably formal and polite, fitting the context of writing to a local council.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are correctly formatted for a formal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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