The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first given bar chart provides information about the number of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000,
while
the second presented bar chart
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the percentages of
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the martial
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martial
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marital
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status of grown-op Americans in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
,
the
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married
people
experience
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a downward trend,
while
the
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divorced individuals showed a steady trend throughout the
period
. The married
people
was
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the highest,
whereas
the divorced individuals
was
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the lowest over the
period
.
In addition
, in both years 1970 and 2000, the
percentagees
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percentages
percentage
of married
was decrease
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,
while
divorced was rose. Looking in more detail, in 1970,
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marriage accounted for 2.5
millions
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and it
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until 1980 before declining significantly to 2
millions
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at the end
of the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, the divorced made up 1 million before increasing to around 1,3
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in 1980;
however
, it showed a considerable decline to 1 million in 2000. In 1970, the married
people
predominated the marital status, at 70%,
while
it fell noticeably to 60% in 2000.
Additionally
, there was a slight decline
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the widowed from about 8% in 1970 to around 6% in 2000.
In contrast
, the divorced experienced a considerable growth from nearly 2% in 1970 to almost 10% in 2000.
Finally
, the
never married
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people
rose from nearly 15% in1970 to 20% in 2000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marriage rate
  • divorce rate
  • marital status
  • adult Americans
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • nadir
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • patterns
  • factors
  • social factors
  • distribution
  • significant differences
  • anomalies
  • speculate
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