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The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph illustrates the estimated total
population
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 of
Asian
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Elephant
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 in 9 countries from 1994 to 2007.
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, India had the highest amount of
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elephant
population
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whereas
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 Vietnam, Laos and China had the lowest
population
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 over the period given. In 1997, there were almost 10000
elephants
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 found in India, and it dropped a quarter to around 7500 in 2004.
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 of
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asian
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elephants
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 were higher in 1997 with just above 5000 species,
then
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this
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 number fell slightly to below 5000 in 2004.
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, 3500
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asian
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elephants
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 inhabited Thailand in 1970, but it
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 decreased to approximately 1000
at the end
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 of the period. Malaysia and Sri Lanka shared the same amount of
population
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 in 1997 accounting for 3000
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asian
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elephants
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.
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, in 2004, there was a minor decline in Sri Lanka where the
population
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 decreased to around 2700
elephants
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 meanwhile Malaysia was left with only 1000
elephants
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. The number of
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asian
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elephants
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 in Vietnam, Laos and China was the lowest compared to all regions. Vietnam and Laos' estimated
population
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 were slightly above 1000 over the period. For China, they had 1000
elephants
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 in 1997, but the
population
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 declined to around 500 of them in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, asian, elephants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trend
  • decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • population
  • significant
  • dramatic
  • stability
  • data
  • estimate
  • notable
  • comparative
  • contrast
  • approximately
  • maximum
  • over the period
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