๐˜›๐˜ฉ๐˜ฆ ๐˜‹๐˜ช๐˜ข๐˜จ๐˜ณ๐˜ข๐˜ฎ๐˜ด ๐˜ฃ๐˜ฆ๐˜ญ๐˜ฐ๐˜ธ ๐˜ด๐˜ฉ๐˜ฐ๐˜ธ ๐˜ข ๐˜ด๐˜ฎ๐˜ข๐˜ญ๐˜ญ ๐˜ญ๐˜ฐ๐˜ค๐˜ข๐˜ญ ๐˜ฎ๐˜ถ๐˜ด๐˜ฆ๐˜ถ๐˜ฎ ๐˜ข๐˜ฏ๐˜ฅ ๐˜ช๐˜ต๐˜ด ๐˜ด๐˜ถ๐˜ณ๐˜ณ๐˜ฐ๐˜ถ๐˜ฏ๐˜ฅ๐˜ช๐˜ฏ๐˜จ๐˜ด ๐˜ช๐˜ฏ 1957 ๐˜ข๐˜ฏ๐˜ฅ 2007

Two pictures describe information about the difference between museums between 1957 and 2007.
Overall
, there current situation of the
museum
has been renovated between the inside and outside.
In addition
, the car park has been added to make it easier for visitors to
coming
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to the
museum
and several rooms have been
building
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to make the
museum
more convenient.
To begin
with, in 2007 on the north side of the
museum
, several pine trees were removed and built into special exhibitions and education rooms.
Then
the national history exhibition changed to a local history room.
Besides
that, the
museum
opened a new
museum
shop and cafรฉ which can be used by the visitors.
Instead
, in 2007 on the south side of the
museum
, today, the garden in front of the
museum
which is located near the broadways was replaced with a large way. the government replaced the pedestrian way
to
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a large way in which the vehicle can enter the areas of the
museum
.
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introduction conclusion present
Add a clear introduction to outline the purpose of the essay and provide a concise conclusion to summarize the main changes.
logical structure
Organize the essay with clear paragraphs, making it easier to follow the progression of ideas. Ensure that each change is discussed in its own paragraph.
complete response
Provide more specific comparisons between the diagrams to fully cover the task. Mention any other significant changes observed from 1957 to 2007.
supported main points
The essay addresses the changes in the museum and its surroundings between 1957 and 2007, highlighting key renovations.
logical structure
Many of the suggested changes are logical and help paint a picture of the development over the years.

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