You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
Most countries require
people
to spend for their medical needs, however
some think that the government should financially support Add a comma
however,
this
aspect. I strongly agree that the authority
should be responsible Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
to pay
for the medical care of the Change preposition
for paying
people
as this
will provide many benefits to the country and the citizen
.
One of the advantages is Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
this
can help to prevent untreated disease
from attacking more people
across the globe. This
is because many people
fear to come
to a hospital or a clinic to get a medical checkup as they are afraid Change the verb form
coming
to
the expensive cost they will be charged. Change preposition
of
For example
, a contagious disease
such
as malaria has become a threat to so many people
as this
disease
is most common to the poor who did
not get enough medical treatment.
To add more, providing Wrong verb form
do
a
free treatment to Remove the article
apply
people
will guarantee a
better health for citizens. More healthy Remove the article
apply
people
will lead to a well
condition for Change the adverb
good
people
to perform better at work or school. For instance
, there is an increasing rate on
students who achieved Change preposition
of
a remarkable academic results
as they are receiving Correct the article-noun agreement
remarkable academic results
a remarkable academic result
a
free medical Correct article usage
apply
checkup
at school to ensure more students are healthy Fix the agreement mistake
checkups
to
attend school. It is true that free medical care will make one's country more successful as Rephrase
enough to
this
will produce more healthy workers and students.
In conclusion, if the government provide free medical care for their people
, this
will give more advantages than drawbacks to the nation. Not only this
will provide healthier
chance to the poor, but will Add an article
a healthier
the healthier
also
prevent any contagious disease
to become
a deadly threat worldwide.Change preposition
from becoming
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain a consistent and logical flow throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
Discuss a possible counterargument or acknowledge some potential drawbacks to strengthen the overall argument and show thorough understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
Task Achievement
The writer gives relevant examples, such as the case of malaria and student health checkups, to support the main points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite