You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Most countries require
people
to spend for their medical needs,
however
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some think that the government should financially support
this
aspect. I strongly agree that the
authority
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authorities
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should be responsible
to pay
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for paying
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for the medical care of the
people
as
this
will provide many benefits to the country and the
citizen
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citizens
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. One of the advantages is
this
can help to prevent untreated
disease
from attacking more
people
across the globe.
This
is because many
people
fear
to come
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to a hospital or a clinic to get a medical checkup as they are afraid
to
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of
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the expensive cost they will be charged.
For example
, a contagious
disease
such
as malaria has become a threat to so many
people
as
this
disease
is most common to the poor who
did
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not get enough medical treatment. To add more, providing
a
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free treatment to
people
will guarantee
a
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better health for citizens. More healthy
people
will lead to a
well
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good
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condition for
people
to perform better at work or school.
For instance
, there is an increasing rate
on
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of
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students who achieved
a remarkable academic results
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remarkable academic results
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as they are receiving
a
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apply
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free medical
checkup
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checkups
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at school to ensure more students are healthy
to
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enough to
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attend school. It is true that free medical care will make one's country more successful as
this
will produce more healthy workers and students. In conclusion, if the government provide free medical care for their
people
,
this
will give more advantages than drawbacks to the nation. Not only
this
will provide
healthier
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a healthier
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chance to the poor, but will
also
prevent any contagious
disease
to become
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from becoming
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a deadly threat worldwide.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain a consistent and logical flow throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
Discuss a possible counterargument or acknowledge some potential drawbacks to strengthen the overall argument and show thorough understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
Task Achievement
The writer gives relevant examples, such as the case of malaria and student health checkups, to support the main points.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • financial distress
  • healthcare inequalities
  • preventive care
  • medical check-ups
  • healthcare system
  • government budgets
  • economic stability
  • quality of care
  • overburdened healthcare facilities
  • efficient management
  • sustainability
  • wastage of resources
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