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Task 1. The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009; the second compares the percentage of trains running on time and target in the period.

Task 1. The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009; the second compares the percentage of trains running on time and target in the period.
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The first line graph below indicates the data on the numbers of
train
 passengers
whereas
 the second diagram gives information about the percentage of trains running punctually in the period from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
, the number of people using
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the train
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train
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trains
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 fluctuated steadily around 35-46
millions
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million
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 passengers
during
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over
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 nine
years
. Meanwhile, the average of trains running on time and the annual target remained stable at 95%. As can be seen
in
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2000 and 2003 are
years
 having minimum
passenger
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passengers
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 about 35
millions
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million
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. Several of people
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who used
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used
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use
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train
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trains
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 dramatically increased to 46
millions
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million
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 in 2005. In 2008,
total
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the total
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 of commuters
used
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who used
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 the
train
 as their means of transport fell suddenly to 46
millions
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million
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,
buts
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 it later saw a slight growth to around 42
millions
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million
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at the end
 of the stage examined.
According to
 the second chart, the schedule being on time
reach
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reached
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to
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92% at the beginning, after that it sharply climbed to 96% in 2004. In
next
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the next
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 two
years
, the percentage decreased substantially to 92%.
However
, it sharply rose and did not change in the
last
 two
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words train, millions, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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