The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket(S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map presents the land use and the population of Garlsdon
town
and also
the two scheduled areas for the new supermarket.
In general, Garlsdon town
is mainly used for industrial land,
and a few areas Remove the comma
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which
are applied for housing.
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town
is comprised of the most factories and some residences. The central part is downtown and the new supermart may be planned to be established here. Moreover
, the central area is surrounded by a wide range of suburbs for industrial land. Besides
, on the north and south side of the suburbs, there are residential areas. Next,
the most exterior district is the countryside, and it is projected that the new supermarket could be constructed in the northwest of the countryside.
According to
the map, there is a railway stretching from the northwest, passing through the countryside, the suburbs, the town
centre, and to the southeast. Additionally
, there are three main roads which connect to other villages. One road which leads to Hindon town
(population 10000) is 12km long. Then
, another road in the southwest which elongates to Bransdon town
(population 15000) is 16km long. Finally
, the motorway in the southeast which extends to the Cransdon district is 25 km long.Submitted by hayashidajinja820 on
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