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"Some people believe that homework is unnecessary and should be banned from schools." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #homework #schools
Many people
beleive
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believe
 that
homework
 is unnecessary and should be banned from school. I think that
homework
 shouldn't be banned, because if the
students
 do not do
a
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homework
 again
in
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at
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the
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home, it’s possible for them to forget dozens of lessons and
also
 how to focus on the topics. I think the
students
 should pay attention more and more to
homework
, it causes solving math problems better and
boost
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 their
confident
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.
Main
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 reason is that when
students
 do
homework
 after school they increase
his
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their
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 knowledge
,
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 because they do exercise they have read.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 parents should pay attention
their
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 sons. When
students
 do a lot of
exercise
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, in my
opininon
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opinion
 they remember many
question
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questions
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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i
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I
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 agree that
students
 need
a
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homework
.
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task achievement
Try to present clear and comprehensive ideas by organizing your essay into well-defined paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.
task achievement
Use relevant and specific examples to support your points. For instance, provide instances of how homework helps reinforce learning.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring that each sentence logically follows from the previous one. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which helps convey the main argument effectively.
task achievement
The main argument in favor of homework is presented clearly, emphasizing the benefits of doing homework for reinforcing learning.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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