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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. what problems does this shortage case? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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 healthy and happy life drinking
water
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 is
very
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 good option. But nowadays, it is very tough to get fresh
water
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 and it is becoming
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 world
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. In
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 I will discuss the
problem
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 of
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issue
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 and some possible solutions to overcome
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this
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problem
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To begin
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 with, the first and foremost
issue
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 is
health
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problems
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. If people are drinking the dirty
water
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 there is no difference if they don't drink it. In
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, if they are not drinking
water
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 they will get
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as well as
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 by drinking dirty
water
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 they will be affected by many
problems
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.
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 is only bearable of pollution which big companies are making by throwing chemicals in rivers or oceans. And poor people and their children are drinking it for survival
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 they already know how harmful it is
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 their
health
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.
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, a survey conducted by Alpha
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 shows that 95% of
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 contains
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elements which can cause cancer or other skin
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. They recommended
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not
drink
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water
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 from rivers.
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, there are some measures which can be done to solve
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problem
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Firstly
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, the government can make
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laws to stop the big companies. So, that they can stop adding
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chemicals to
water
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.
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 more than 50% to solve
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problem
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. Another measure can be done by arranging camps, and lectures by
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the government
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 . Seminars can be conducted in villages to provide them with information
of
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on
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 how dirty
water
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 is affecting their
health
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.
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, a TRI company is
very
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 small company but still, they are making good efforts by conducting camps in villages. In conclusion, there are several
problems
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 the lack of fresh
water
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 is causing, people are having
health
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problems
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 and there are some possible ways to tackle
this
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problem
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.
Government
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The government
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 can take essential steps to recover
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 global
issue
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task achievement
Consider incorporating more specific examples to support your points. While the example from Alpha University is useful, providing additional evidence will strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Enhance clarity by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a specific point or solution. This will help maintain a logical flow and make your essay easier to follow.
task achievement
Clear identification of the main issues related to lack of fresh water and logical connections between them.
coherence cohesion
The essay begins with a clear introduction explaining the problem and ends with a conclusion that summarizes the main points effectively.

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