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The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration describes the
number
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 of students selecting different kinds of courses in a university in 2012.
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, the majority of enrollees both male and female have
choosen
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chosen
 Social
Sciences
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 as their course. Meanwhile, Agricultural
subject
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subjects
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is
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are
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 the least popular for both categories
on
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in
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 the university. The college which is popular among the female enrollees belongs to Social
Sciences
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 with 4000
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number of
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students. It was
subsequently
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 followed by other colleges
such
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 as Health and Humanities with almost half of the
population
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 compared to Social
Sciences
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 with nearly 2000 female learners.
Additonally
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, there were 1000 female scholars who
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choosen
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chosen
Engineering
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an Engineering
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course
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courses
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 which is fifty
percent
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 lower compared to
Helath
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Health
 and Humanities
population
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.
However
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, Science and Math were merely popular with nearly 500
enrolless
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enrollees
. It was
then
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 followed by the least popular to the
enrolless
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enrollees
enrollee
enrolled
 which is Agriculture with only below 500 learners.
On the other hand
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, Social
Sciences
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 garnered the highest
number
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 of male enrollees with almost 3000 students. It was
then
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 followed by
Engineering
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an Engineering
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 course with more than 2000 people, which is one-third of the
number
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 of male Social
Sciences
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. It was
then
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 followed by courses
of
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in
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 Humanities
and
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apply
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Science and Math with more or less 1000 scholars which is half of the Engineering's
population
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. The least popular were Health and Agriculture with less than 1000 in
population
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, sciences, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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