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You are having a party and want to invite your friend from a different city. *describe why you are having the party *give directions on how to get to the venue *suggest how you cab accommodate him or her

#party #friend #city #*describe #*give #directions #venue #*suggest #cab
Dear Carolin, I am delighted to tell you that,I am going to organize a wonderful wedding anniversary party on coming 5th of November in a grand
hotel
at
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 our city.I would like to invite you and your family to join
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us with
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with
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this
 special occasion as you are
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 one and only friend for me.Since it will be the
last
 celebration here in Sri Lanka,
so
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I decided to share my happiness with
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 of
kind hearted
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 people like you. I should let you know the direction of
venue
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the venue
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 which is not in a hidden place.Despite
of
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a
struggled
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 journey from your home,it is
an
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easy access to reach the
hotel
 as it is situated in the middle
if
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of
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 the city,near to the main bus stop.Once you
attain
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 there,you
cabn
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can
 notice a shopping mall and if you turn right where you can have a look
of
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 a grand
five floor
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hotel
 and
that is
 the destination of the party. I guess you would be glad to know that I can
also
 arrange the accommodation for you right there in that particular
hotel
 as it has vast facilities for their customers.
Moreover
, you can stay there with your family members for five days. Best regards, Paanujah
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writing mechanics
Ensure to check for small typing errors, like closing spaces after commas (e.g., 'tell you that,I am') and minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'you cabn notice' should be 'you can notice').
structuring
Consider using paragraphs to clearly separate the sections of the essay, such as introduction, main content, and conclusion.
task response
The purpose of the party is clearly stated, and the invitation is nicely personalized with a sense of warmth and anticipation.
task response
The directions to the venue are detailed and easy to follow, giving a precise indication of how to locate the place.
task response
The offer for accommodation is a thoughtful suggestion and adds value to the invitation.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical flow, starting with the invitation, followed by directions, and ending with accommodation suggestions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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