The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the

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how

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old

people

in Europe spent their leisure

time

from 1980 to 2010.

Overall

, it can be seen that there were many activities that elder

people

in Europe did

such

as Reading, Hiking, Theatre, Watching TV,

Surfing

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and Surfing

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the internet. The highest activities that old

people

did was hiking and the lowest was theatre. In detail, in 1980 around 60%

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elder

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older

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people

spent their

time

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watching

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, followed by theatre around 50%, and

then

reading activity, there was 30

percent

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per cent

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of old

people

spent their leisure

time

just reading. There

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20% of older

people

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their

time

only

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hiking and around

under

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10%

older

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of older

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people

did surfing the internet. Hiking activity

increase

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sharply until 2010 around 80%.

Besides

that, watching TV activity

increase

gradually

around

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70% and

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decreased

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again in 2010

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over

60%.

In contrast

, in 1980, around 30% of elder

people

in Europe

spend

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spent

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their

time

for

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reading and

increase

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in 1990

around

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40% and

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decreased

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again in 2000

about

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20% and 10 years after

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sharply

until

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60%.

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, around

below

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10%

older

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of older

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people

did surfing the internet

and

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which

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slowly

increase

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increased

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in 2000

around

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overthan

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over than

10%, and

increase

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significantly

around

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50% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, time, increase with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 10 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

204 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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Topic Vocabulary:

Elderly population
Leisure activities
Trends
Popularity
Steady rise
Gradual increase
Growing interest
Decline
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