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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

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The line graph illustrates how many people have visited an
island
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 in the Caribbean Ocean since 2010.
Overall
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, a group stayed on cruise ships and others remained on the
island
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 both demonstrated a growth in numbers over the period with some fluctuations. In 2010, the highest
number
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 was in favour of those who stayed on the
island
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, with 0.75
million
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 visitors.
This
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number
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 increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013 before reaching a plateau
until
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in
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 2015. The plateau displayed a small decrease of 1.25
million
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 in 2016
then
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 it backed to its original figure of 2015.
On the contrary
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, those who stayed on cruise ships were least at the beginning of the period and demonstrated a strong upward growth in their numbers. Their figure in 2010 of 0.25
million
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 soared to 2
million
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 in 2017.
To sum up
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, the total
number
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 of travellers to
this
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 particular Caribbean
island
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 experienced a dramatic growth. Their
number
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 doubled to 2
million
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 by 2013 and continued to increase to reach 3.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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