The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The line graph illustrates how many people have visited an
island
in the Caribbean Ocean since 2010.
Overall
, a group stayed on cruise ships and others remained on the
island
both demonstrated a growth in numbers over the period with some fluctuations. In 2010, the highest
number
was in favour of those who stayed on the
island
, with 0.75
million
visitors.
This
number
increased to 1.5
million
in 2013 before reaching a plateau
until
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2015. The plateau displayed a small decrease of 1.25
million
in 2016
then
it backed to its original figure of 2015.
On the contrary
, those who stayed on cruise ships were least at the beginning of the period and demonstrated a strong upward growth in their numbers. Their figure in 2010 of 0.25
million
soared to 2
million
in 2017.
To sum up
, the total
number
of travellers to
this
particular Caribbean
island
experienced a dramatic growth. Their
number
doubled to 2
million
by 2013 and continued to increase to reach 3.5
million
in 2017.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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