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The graph below how the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below how the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the amount of visitors to a specific Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Moreover
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, they are divided into
people
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 who stayed on cruise ships, who slept directly on the
island
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 and a combination of both.
Firstly
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, the number of tourists who chose cruise ships had an
overall
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 positive trend. In fact, after a small spike between
year
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 2010 and 2012, in the
last
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 5 years there was a gradual increase every
year
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. Indeed, in 2012 only roughly 250 thousand
people
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 arrived on the
island
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 by boat, but later in 2017 nearly two million
people
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 did!
Secondly
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,
people
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 who remained on the
island
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 had a more fluctuating trend.
Initially
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, they remained steady for two years at 750 thousand, afterwards, they doubled in 2013 reaching 1.5 million.
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the number remained stable, the only exception was a small dip in 2016.
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, all the tourists combined had an upward trend every
year
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, starting at 1 million in 2010, and finishing at 3.5 in 2017! The only
year
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 the amount didn't rise was 2016
,
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 when they equalized the number of the
year
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 before.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, people, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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