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The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence (crime). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The presented bar chart
compare
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compares
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 data about the
precentage
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percentage
 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 who
arrested
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were arrested
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by
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for
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 various
type
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types
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 of
crime
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.
Overall
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, the statistics for violence against the person and theft and handling stolen goods in
female
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the female
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gender
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 were higher than others, and robbery offence was the
lowset
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lowest
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 level in both
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gender
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genders
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.
According to
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 the bar chart,
it is clear that
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level
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the level
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 of
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the female
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female
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females
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gender
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 who their violence against
the
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a
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 person
crime
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 was equal
around
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 34% and for theft and handling stolen
good
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goods
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crime
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 it
equal
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 around 31%.
Following
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this
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,
in
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male
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the male
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 side in violence against the person
crime
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almost
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was almost
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 31% and for theft and handling stolen goods was equal to 20%.
Therefore
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, the lowest
one
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ones
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 for both
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gender
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genders
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 were
robby
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Robby
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 and fraud and forgery, for
female
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females
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the
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they
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robby
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were
 roughly around 1%
while
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 fraud and forgery
almost
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were almost
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 3%.
Similarly
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 for
male
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males
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,
the
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apply
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both
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crime
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crimes
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 it nearly 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, gender with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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